Comments for MyArticleReview.com : where your articles reach perfection http://www.myarticlereview.com Submit your essays, articles, and other texts for critics by experts. Fri, 21 Nov 2008 06:57:40 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.5 Comment on Gastric Banding by Deusdies http://www.myarticlereview.com/2008/04/gastric-banding/#comment-15 Deusdies Sat, 19 Apr 2008 17:00:33 +0000 http://myarticlereview.com/beta/?p=5#comment-15 Hi Dickie, Frankly, I don't know how you discovered this part of the website. This is still in beta, and will be launched soon (Note: today's date: 04/19/2008). From what I know, Safari indeed does not support the editor. I'll see what I can do about it. Regards, Bob Hi Dickie,

Frankly, I don’t know how you discovered this part of the website. This is still in beta, and will be launched soon (Note: today’s date: 04/19/2008).

From what I know, Safari indeed does not support the editor. I’ll see what I can do about it.

Regards,
Bob

]]> Comment on Gastric Banding by dickie http://www.myarticlereview.com/2008/04/gastric-banding/#comment-14 dickie Sat, 19 Apr 2008 09:23:29 +0000 http://myarticlereview.com/beta/?p=5#comment-14 Hi, I use Safari and your upload function tells me this browser doesn't support html in your article editor.... Hi,
I use Safari and your upload function tells me this browser doesn’t support html in your article editor….

]]> Comment on Small Stream Fly Fishing by Deusdies http://www.myarticlereview.com/2008/04/small-stream-fly-fishing/#comment-13 Deusdies Sat, 19 Apr 2008 01:25:08 +0000 http://myarticlereview.com/beta/?p=4#comment-13 NOTE: The following comment was originally posted by Dave, the author of this article. Since we had problems converting comments, I will quote the comment: "Thanks for the critique Bob! I'm just beginning with articles and blogging, so any input is greatly appreciated!" Well, good luck, Dave! My doors are always open for you! NOTE: The following comment was originally posted by Dave, the author of this article. Since we had problems converting comments, I will quote the comment:

“Thanks for the critique Bob! I’m just beginning with articles and blogging, so any input is greatly appreciated!”

Well, good luck, Dave! My doors are always open for you!

]]> Comment on Small Stream Fly Fishing by Deusdies http://www.myarticlereview.com/2008/04/small-stream-fly-fishing/#comment-12 Deusdies Sat, 19 Apr 2008 01:24:20 +0000 http://myarticlereview.com/beta/?p=4#comment-12 To be honest with you, this article does not follow any standard guidelines. However, if I look from reader's perspective, I must say that this article is quite informative. Therefore, no need to worry. If you really want to improve your writing style, then you should find some articles on that subject. I use this opportunity to inform you that I am also preparing Article Writing Tips on this website. To be honest with you, this article does not follow any standard guidelines. However, if I look from reader’s perspective, I must say that this article is quite informative. Therefore, no need to worry. If you really want to improve your writing style, then you should find some articles on that subject. I use this opportunity to inform you that I am also preparing Article Writing Tips on this website.

]]> Comment on The Home Office Concept by Deusdies http://www.myarticlereview.com/2008/04/the-home-office-concept/#comment-11 Deusdies Sat, 19 Apr 2008 01:23:21 +0000 http://myarticlereview.com/beta/?p=8#comment-11 I think I have no remarks regarding this article. Keep up the good work! I think I have no remarks regarding this article. Keep up the good work!

]]> Comment on Discipline Must Begin at Home by Deusdies http://www.myarticlereview.com/2008/04/discipline-must-begin-at-home/#comment-10 Deusdies Sat, 19 Apr 2008 01:22:35 +0000 http://myarticlereview.com/beta/?p=7#comment-10 Article is very well-written. There are minor fluxations about keeping constant formal register, but that is OK. Paragraph interconnecting words (Finally, In addition, To begin with) are used in appropriate places. I'd just have to say that you might try to make your articles a little bit more interesting for your readers. However, this article deserves 9/10 Article is very well-written.

There are minor fluxations about keeping constant formal register, but that is OK. Paragraph interconnecting words (Finally, In addition, To begin with) are used in appropriate places. I’d just have to say that you might try to make your articles a little bit more interesting for your readers. However, this article deserves 9/10

]]> Comment on Gastric Banding by Deusdies http://www.myarticlereview.com/2008/04/gastric-banding/#comment-9 Deusdies Sat, 19 Apr 2008 01:21:47 +0000 http://myarticlereview.com/beta/?p=5#comment-9 Clear section headings are definitely a plus. However, you need something to do to make your articles more interesting to readers. Don't just write like typewriter! Get into the position! Experience it! Clear section headings are definitely a plus. However, you need something to do to make your articles more interesting to readers. Don’t just write like typewriter! Get into the position! Experience it!

]]> Comment on The Open Doors by Deusdies http://www.myarticlereview.com/2008/04/the-open-doors/#comment-8 Deusdies Sat, 19 Apr 2008 01:20:44 +0000 http://myarticlereview.com/beta/?p=9#comment-8 Hello Eleanor, Thank you for submitting your article for reviewal. I must say I really enjoyed reading this article! I could picture the whole thing happening around me, and I think that's the primary goal of every writing. I am sure that readers will find this indeed interesting. Good work! However, I must point out some of the "mistakes" in your very style of writing. From the writer's point of view, I'm finding it difficult to understand - are you trying to have informal or formal word register? Writing in first case in 90% of cases points out to informal register; however, I am seeing some of the "formal words" - a good tip is when writing in informal register, you should not hesitate to use phrasal verbs. In addition, I would like to advise you to keep your article a little bit more clear for reading - make paragraphs, with appropriate interconnecting words (e.g. However, In addition, Therefore etc.). It'll be a lot easier for an average reader to comprehense. Kindest regards, Bob Mill Hello Eleanor,

Thank you for submitting your article for reviewal.
I must say I really enjoyed reading this article! I could picture the whole thing happening around me, and I think that’s the primary goal of every writing. I am sure that readers will find this indeed interesting. Good work! However, I must point out some of the “mistakes” in your very style of writing. From the writer’s point of view, I’m finding it difficult to understand - are you trying to have informal or formal word register? Writing in first case in 90% of cases points out to informal register; however, I am seeing some of the “formal words” - a good tip is when writing in informal register, you should not hesitate to use phrasal verbs. In addition, I would like to advise you to keep your article a little bit more clear for reading - make paragraphs, with appropriate interconnecting words (e.g. However, In addition, Therefore etc.).
It’ll be a lot easier for an average reader to comprehense.

Kindest regards,
Bob Mill

]]> Comment on University information by Deusdies http://www.myarticlereview.com/2008/04/university-information/#comment-7 Deusdies Sat, 19 Apr 2008 01:19:47 +0000 http://myarticlereview.com/beta/?p=10#comment-7 This is indeed very impressive article. Constant register, using appropriate words (though I would suggest using "stated" instead of "said" sometimes), and having clean paragraphs. However, even though I am quite sure that your are constantly repeating StudentStyle.net in order to make your readers remember the address of your website, it might be a little bit tiring. For example, while I was reading this, there was a point I thought this article contained nothing but "StudentStyle.net, StudentStyle.net ...". I had to rest my eyes for a second. Other than that, this article is quite interesting and should perform well. This is indeed very impressive article. Constant register, using appropriate words (though I would suggest using “stated” instead of “said” sometimes), and having clean paragraphs.

However, even though I am quite sure that your are constantly repeating StudentStyle.net in order to make your readers remember the address of your website, it might be a little bit tiring. For example, while I was reading this, there was a point I thought this article contained nothing but “StudentStyle.net, StudentStyle.net …”. I had to rest my eyes for a second. Other than that, this article is quite interesting and should perform well.

]]> Comment on Acute Alcohol Poisoning - Drinking Can Kill by Deusdies http://www.myarticlereview.com/2008/04/acute-alcohol-poisoning-drinking-can-kill/#comment-6 Deusdies Sat, 19 Apr 2008 01:18:31 +0000 http://myarticlereview.com/beta/?p=15#comment-6 The "So how do we know how much is “too much”?" was very, what one may call, attractive. You should include even more of those subtitles attention-gettings. This article meets standard informative article guidelines, as published by MLA. I absolutely agree that this article shows numerous of circuimstances, and therefore is certainly quite informative. I am not an expert in this field, but from the point of view of an reviewer - I'd have to say this article is excellent. The “So how do we know how much is “too much”?” was very, what one may call, attractive. You should include even more of those subtitles attention-gettings.

This article meets standard informative article guidelines, as published by MLA. I absolutely agree that this article shows numerous of circuimstances, and therefore is certainly quite informative. I am not an expert in this field, but from the point of view of an reviewer - I’d have to say this article is excellent.

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